Story/Angle Idea for Dalton

[The_Last_Hero]

I hope this is the right place to post this.

I was thinking with my character, Dalton, could he develop a "split personality", not straight away of course, but I thought becuase he keeps losing he could snap and every so often appears as a completely different person who is violent and has little regard for rules.

Tell me what you think!

[The Epic]

Well,it's not the most original thing,but I like the idea.It seems to fit the situation well.

Also,the content of your RPs is pretty solid.There are few grammar or spelling mistakes at all.If they were just a little longer I think you'd easily pick up some wins.Either way it's cool that you're trying to improve on your character instead of bitching about not getting wins like most would do.

[Cartman]

thats cool dude.. but remember a character change won't guaentee new wins... only better lengthier rp's will..

so read some of the better rp'ers rp's like belmont, lennox, demarco etc and see what they do to make great rp's and come up with your new charatcer design in your rp's..

tim

[The_Last_Hero]

I didn't expect a character change to affect the outcomes of my matches. I know it's all to do with my roleplays, I'm still in the learning process since this is like the first time I have fully been part of an e-fed.

I don't suppose I could ask for people to critique my rps so I can identify my better ones, anything would be great help.

ANY way back to the angle =).

Just one question, would it be easier if I posted an application for this split personality since it is more or less and different character?

Thanks again, keep me posted!

[The Epic]

I don't know about your question,that's Tims choice.

As far as your RPs go it's like I said.I think the style you post in is pretty good.I haven't seen any grammar errors which is something I can't even say about my own RPs.I think if maybe your RPs were 1 1/2 times the length or maybe even twice the length then you'd be wiinning some matches.

[Revolver Adam]

If you guys don't mind, I'll write an article about my writing process and how I rp. Just to give you a little incite into my methods, because they seem to be well received.

[Cartman]

sure thing bro.. <--- (adam's responce)

and yes add the separate app and will he be face/heel? that way i know what charatcer to use against whom?

tim

[The_Last_Hero]

I thought it would suit the angle better if the other personality was heel. Should i submit the character in the applications area, I know that seems like the logical place, or would it go here since its part of a stroyline-ish?

[Teen Spirit]

put it in the applications thread.

this isn't for stuff like that


Teen Spirit