The Winds Of Change

[Latino Heat lives on]

[center:5e5cf5cf93]The scene opens at a bar in Portland,Oregon.Johnny Bullet and Chris Almighty enter the bar before walking over to the counter and taking a seat each.Chris Almighty then calls a waitress over.

Chris:
Two beers,please.

As the waitress goes off to get the drinks,Chris turns to face Johnny.

Chris:
What time’s our flight?

Johnny:
No idea.Jake’s supposed to call meanytime soon.

Chris:
How are we getting there?

Johnny:
Jake’s bringing the limo here.

Chris:
Oh…Ok then.

The waitress brings the two beers before walking off to serve others.Johnny and Chris drink in without speaking.After a few minutes,Chris breaks the silence.

Chris:
So,you’re ready to face Sanchez?

Johnny:
I s’pose.

Chris:
Really?You don’t sound like you’re ready….are you..OK,pal?

Johnny drinks a bit more,pondering his answer.He then slowly speaks…..

Johnny:
Well,I guess I’m just not used to this kind of match.I mean,since we joined the company,we’ve always gone into the match with the intention of just getting the job done.You know what I mean?

Chris:
Yeah,I do.So what’s the problem?

Johnny:
Well,tomorrow night,I’m not supposed to do that.I’m supposed to give a great wrestling match.With all those technical submission holds,and a bunch of high flying moves.I can do that,I know I can,but we’ve always been about illegal manoeuvres,foreign objects…and suddenly everything needs to change.

Chris:
Hey,it’s just for one night pal.After that,it all goes back to the usual.No one will really care if you lose tomorrow night.After that match,the old gameplan can come back into play.

Johnny:
You really think so?You think the next time we face Sanchez and Jones,we could actually bring ourselves to break the rules?

Chris:
Why not?

Johnny:
Dude,Sanchez helped to save your skin.Without him,the reVolution might have killed me.

Chris:
I guess….Well,we could just become friends with Sanchez and Jones….real friends…

Johnny:
Maybe….

Chris:
Hey,we could be Florida’s Almighty Bullet….

Johnny:
Hell no,dude.I hate Florida.That place stinks.Except for Orlando,there’s a show that goes down there that is off the chain.

Chris:
Getting back to the point Johnny…don’t worry too much about tomorrow.Just go out there,and give them a great match like we promised.Who knows,maybe it is possible to win a match without resorting to,er…underhand tactics.

Johnny:
You’re probably right…..anyway…

Just then,Jake Bullet interrupts the pair.

Jake:
Gentlemen,it’s time to go.We cannot afford to be late.Your flight’s at 0100 hours.

Chris:
What’s that in people time?

Johnny:
1 in the morning.Let’s move,fellas.

Johnny leaves a 50-dollar bill at the counter before he,Chris and Jake exit the bar.
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Not a great RP by any means,so I'd appreaciate any feedback.[/center:5e5cf5cf93]

[Cartman]

OOC--

ok some things that can take you over the top is length of course... but add some detail. it ads to the over all rp and sets a good stage for the characters and the setting. you have a one sentence detail intro.

EX:

Chris and Johnny are riding in the back of a rented limo provided by WcE. Across from Johnny is his manager brother Jake. They are taking in the scenic view of downtown Portland as they are heading to a local bar for a night of fun before having to prepare for their match at Unleashed!

Jake:
I've got some CD's of some of Flordia's Finest's hardest fought matches for you to study Johnny. Chris you should watch them too.

Jake hands over a small hand held DVD player as the two watch with intent at the matches as the Limo pulls into the bar.

Chris:
Yeah dude, if you move just right you should be able to counter that move just right.

EX: Over!

just to show what i was saying...

TIm

[Latino Heat lives on]

Thanks for the ideas,Tim.It certainly helps when it comes to content and length.

[Cartman]

OOC-

other ideas you can try are friends /reletives from the past visiting. or like your introucing chris to your family. youe meeting his family etc.. delving intot he past is all material and when it's new and fresh it always adds to your charatcers history which is what your goal in fantasy roleplaying is al about... fleshing out a realistic character...

tim

[rdarnz]

Also dude, you seem to over-use punctuation, such as commas but that's probably 'cause of your nationality. I also always leave a space after a full-stop. Minor things, but they all add up.

As for RP content feedback, I'm liking the way you've continued to build the match as one with nothing major at stake, other than honouring the memory of Gonzo and Duke. Nice work dude.